meh just made the text more imperialistic and victorian english.
i think i've just hit a bum note though in all honesty
( Tom O'Bedlam I have control of a tank, Sun 25 May 2008, 23:44, archived)

naw it looks seemless enough
in terms of the text
it's just that the words you edited are too bright so they're easily noticeable.
(quibble, Sun 25 May 2008, 23:58, archived)