The first chapter is really fucking appaling though.
The original novel, the first draft, has been completely rewritten with the exception of the first chapter. Which still has the remnants of the boring, adolescent ranty shit in it, and given that the first will ultimately be the most important chapter it needs to run through well and be interesting enough to keep the people going the first 6 or so chapters until any intersting shit happens.
(Jeru War and Piss, Thu 7 Aug 2008, 3:41, archived)

that's one of the advantages of my book
it doesn't really have a story to follow, it's just a series of self-contained little pieces.
EDIT: i'm off to bed. g'night!
( Smash Monkey it's a bitch convincing people to like you, Thu 7 Aug 2008, 3:43, archived)