good times...
when i was a nipper n my brother was very young i gave him a ball of white wool (we had a white cat at the time) and asked him in a very sad voice "oooooo nooo what have you done to peggy" (peggy was the cats name) and it properly freaked him out hahahahah!!! im a bad person
(kristofski6992, Thu 13 Dec 2007, 20:53, 7 replies)

What in the name of yellow rubbery fuck...
1. Learn the English language.
2. Kill yourself.
3. Message ends.




(Twat)
(osok Rebel without a clue, Thu 13 Dec 2007, 21:53, closed)

Okay, its no work of literary genius,
but really- perhaps an overreaction?
You're the fucking twat.
(Tip-Top Tomcat but you can call me Tommo, Thu 13 Dec 2007, 22:23, closed)

Look, if you're going to criticize, at least do it properly.
When I was young I had a fluffy little white cat named Peggy, who we loved.

One day as my little brother was playing I thought up a diabolical scheme. Sneaking into Mom's knitting basket I took out a ball of white wool. Carrying it in my hands like a fallen hero I approached my little brother. "What have you done to Peggy? What did you do?" I wailed in my most heartbroken voice.

He completely freaked, of course.

Yes, I know. Hull, one ticket, please...

(Just a quick example of how I might have approached it. You need to work on filling in detail and building mood.)
( The Resident Loon Not a demographic. Do not measure., Thu 13 Dec 2007, 22:35, closed)

What osok said...
Was exactly what was going through my mind. I fear you are no story teller, little kristofski.
( vix0r was not Matthew on, Thu 13 Dec 2007, 22:58, closed)

Okay, maybe a little harsh
But you should maybe have taken the advice given after your first post last week?

Although you're using full words now, so definitely an improvement. :)

So, lets wind the Defcon Status down a tad and revise:

1. Continue to learn English. Punctuation and stuff.
2. Slap yourself.


(And yes I am a fucking twat, thanks. Proud of it. Blame Captain Morgan)
(osok Rebel without a clue, Fri 14 Dec 2007, 10:20, closed)

osok
You should learn to handle your rum better - Captain Morgan would be disappointed in you.
( aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa, Fri 14 Dec 2007, 14:43, closed)

"When I was young I had a fluffy little white cat named Peggy, who we loved."
Shouldn't that be "whom we loved" if we're being pedantic? :P
(Musuko, Tue 18 Dec 2007, 14:22, closed)