Some good wit there
- but I feel like you're dumping big dollops of info on me every few paragraphs. It might just be my taste, but I prefer to learn things just a touch slower: hold back on the reveal about the Rev's alcoholism, or Elizabeth's journalist career till later.
In King's novels, he'd often keep a character as a background extra for a good while, then give you their story in a rush in the chapter where they were the star for a while - usually just before they die horribly, of course.
Keep at it! Write plenty, edit later.
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Invisible Wizard - 12th Level Errorer, Thu 19 Dec 2019, 19:04,
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