It got made, which is impressive. I liked the vintage touches.
I have a few creative and technical criticisms:
The plot seems AImless and disjointed. The jokes seem incidental and AImless, with some seeming incomplete or only partially told (bass fishing, for example).
The audio elements are not all animated, or alternatively, the sound effects describe events that do not occur visually. I get that they are classic samples, but references should make sense.
The audio quality of the different voice actors is jarringly disparate. If I were producing this I'd get the lady to re-record everything (hers is the least good quality mic, and her recording distorts several times), and I'd use filtering and other effects to lower the quality of the other actors' recordings to match hers. I'd then place the voices in an acoustic space designed to match the visuals.
May I presume to suggest your next project is first written, rewritten, then storyboarded, then re-rewritten and re-storyboarded, then record the audio, produce the audio, make an animatic storyboard, make any final changes, then animate.
Apologies for the blunt cuntiness. Congratulations on actually finishing and releasing something!
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brb Monkhouse Stampede, Tue 15 Jul 2025, 22:59,
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