creative writing exam gone dark and twisty
I made this!
For my final exams i had to create a piece of writing using some phrases. the link is what i wrote and am looking for some reviews before i get my results back...
hope you guys can help!
tried to make it as dark and twisty as possible!
(, Fri 10 Jun 2011, 0:09, Reply)
I'm afraid I'm not qualified to comment on its artistic merit
but from a technical standpoint, can I suggest that you look at the tenses? You seem to switch from past to present to past tense almost from sentence to sentence, and it interrupts the flow a bit for me.
I enjoyed the story though. It was interesting writing and I hope you get a deservedly good grade for it.
/my two cents
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Aardvark and so at last, I understood, Fri 10 Jun 2011, 0:22,
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