Charity Starts At Home
I made this!
We made a sitcom, it's four episodes long and first two are now online. It's about a charity run from a spare room. This is the first episode. It's just over 10 minutes long.
(, Tue 8 Dec 2015, 14:31, Share, Reply)
For what it's worth, I think it's definitely got potential
The problem I see is that 10 minutes is a very short time to establish each individual character, and a comedy like this has got to have really strong characterisation to drive the LOLs.
You could just throw some more "jokes" in there, but since watching Detectorists I'm less of a fan of overt jokes, as such.
Well done, and I especially like the old geezer.
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Mr Mann I love pigs, best of all the animals, Tue 8 Dec 2015, 16:04,
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Hey, sorry, I failed to see this reply, thanks for watching and the feedback - heartening!
(, Tue 15 Dec 2015, 13:13, Share, Reply)
Yup, the older fella is excellent.
I liked it. Having seen early Mitchell and Webb, and Lucas and Walliams, I'd say keep at it.
Mr Mann's right about the characters, especially about their strength driving the humour.
I'm going to watch the rest, so something's working.
edit: maybe I'll stop at the second one. Something's not working.
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gingerfreak Why? Why not., Tue 8 Dec 2015, 20:23,
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