Right...
Now go away and pare it down to 500 words, and you'll have a good little story!!

Not sure how serious everyone is about this, but I would strongly recommend working in 'Word', printing off, and editing with a pen before re-drafting EVERY TIME.

Little e.g. about half way through after "I felt a cold sensation..." you don't need to write: "I saw a horrific sight" - just describe what you saw.

Finally, my English teacher would say at the end: "And how did you write this story after blowing your brains out?" but that's the pedant in me.

Keep it up - and do feel free to rip into my story. Oh yes - you could save a few words by using "into" and "onto" as well.

[help yourself to a kitten from the jar on the windowsill]
(Che Grimsdale Best before:, Thu 3 Jul 2008, 14:42, Reply)