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rob, Sun 1 Apr 2001, 1:00)
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Getting right into the action is goodBut I think it may need a bit of set up in this case. Maybe the conversation starting normally, "Honey, we need to talk" kind of thing, then slowly building until the revelation.
The second part's brilliant, very strong.
Good first draft, Che. The emotion is excellent, I could feel the anger pulsing through the words. Nice work
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