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rob, Sun 1 Apr 2001, 1:00)
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clicksfor simplicity that enables greatness.
One bugbear is the word heavy like here
"Now they felt heavy, as heavy as the coin in her husband’s pocket and as heavy as the hollow dark knot inside her."
I'd make it with "Now they felt heavy, as heavy as the coins in her husband's pocket and forboding as the hollow dark knot inside her"
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fuck shit up the best you never had, Sat 5 Jul 2008, 19:14,
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