Hi TRL

First, I agree with Chickenlady: this was a really readable, atmospheric, well-written piece and Griselda (surely not named from the amazing Monkees song??) is a character with plenty of mileage in her. I also agree that this piece just opens the curtains - it could really go somewhere if you wanted it too. I too really love your descriptive passages - your pieces always give me a very rich mental picture and the smells of the outdoors...I can imagine a guy like TRL entering the picture at any moment in rough work boots a plaid shirt, tousled hair and work-hardened hands. Perhaps that's just because I can almost hear your voice narrating, as if you were sitting on a rock nearby watching things unfold.

Secondly, I can vouch for Chickenlady's 100% positive criticism and guidance (note lack of adverbs above!). I've learnt to re-read my own stuff with a much deeper understanding - hence I've not posted a lengthy piece for some time but am working on stuff off-line.

Anyway, as they say: anything you write is good practice, keep 'em coming and that was a really nice way to start the working day.
(Che Grimsdale Best before:, Wed 15 Oct 2008, 9:23, Reply)