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# The dead kid story...
...is a tad on the strong side.

Use your powers wisely.
(, Mon 6 Jan 2003, 18:34, archived)
# i know
but this can go two ways, i keep doing it or i dont keep doing it. therefore i have to start with something big. anyway, the body of the story is so stupid...
(, Mon 6 Jan 2003, 18:36, archived)
# village green...
stake... and burning at, springs to mind.
Tho I do understand having lived in a small village for a year in my teens cos the folks thought it would be "cute" to live in one..
(, Mon 6 Jan 2003, 18:44, archived)
# oh theres nothing cute about my village
its about as cute as a dysentry ridden goat which has just been "put to sleep" with a hammer through its skull.
(, Mon 6 Jan 2003, 18:49, archived)
# You'ld be better off
making that story have a few more incredulities in it, the current ones, like "lost the use of his face" are a bit subtle, IMO.

I like the "unknown man goes into shop" story, though. That's good.
(, Mon 6 Jan 2003, 18:45, archived)
# well, like i said
i have just thrown it together, i really should have mentioned that this is kind of a draft.
(, Mon 6 Jan 2003, 18:47, archived)