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# true this.
i wrote my first short story ever. I only did it to annoy the missus and prove that it wasn't that hard, but i was rather pleased with the result nonetheless.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:06, archived)
# For those about to write, we salute you!
Keep up the good work, sir.
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:10, archived)
# nah, i've acheived my passive agressive belittlement of her hobby. i'm good :) (and joking)
if you have a few minutes to spare you can read it at

www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/1641071-All-the-Time-in-the-World

it's only 1100 words so it won't take you long.

and it has squirming things and the post human earth and the end of the world.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:14, archived)
# What purpose immortality if you can't have an endless supply of wine, eh?
Cheers!
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:21, archived)
# it's probably the first thing i would install in my indestructable tower :)
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:23, archived)
# ORTHANC!
(I helped save b3ta! The Alchemist king of the needlessly complicated, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:31, archived)
# Hmmm. It was good.
I liked the connection between the light and the wine. And the trapped immortal theme.

Could do with some editing, though. A few sentence restructures, that sort of thing. (like I would know, I'm a scientician :)
(I helped save b3ta! The Alchemist king of the needlessly complicated, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:30, archived)
# fair enuff. it was written in one go with no real editing. i may go back and tweak it if i can be arsed.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:34, archived)
# In one go? Then I am pretty impressed.
(I helped save b3ta! The Alchemist king of the needlessly complicated, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:39, archived)
# in one go and half pissed
i'm like hemingway me. well good at writin' 'n' shit.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:47, archived)