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[challenge entry] Supermassive Black Slab

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(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 17:56, archived)
# HAHAHAHAHAHA
marvellous
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 17:57, archived)
# This week is a good week for writing.
TRUFAX!
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:01, archived)
# true this.
i wrote my first short story ever. I only did it to annoy the missus and prove that it wasn't that hard, but i was rather pleased with the result nonetheless.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:06, archived)
# For those about to write, we salute you!
Keep up the good work, sir.
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:10, archived)
# nah, i've acheived my passive agressive belittlement of her hobby. i'm good :) (and joking)
if you have a few minutes to spare you can read it at

www.writing.com/main/view_item/item_id/1641071-All-the-Time-in-the-World

it's only 1100 words so it won't take you long.

and it has squirming things and the post human earth and the end of the world.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:14, archived)
# What purpose immortality if you can't have an endless supply of wine, eh?
Cheers!
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:21, archived)
# it's probably the first thing i would install in my indestructable tower :)
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:23, archived)
# ORTHANC!
(I helped save b3ta! The Alchemist king of the needlessly complicated, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:31, archived)
# Hmmm. It was good.
I liked the connection between the light and the wine. And the trapped immortal theme.

Could do with some editing, though. A few sentence restructures, that sort of thing. (like I would know, I'm a scientician :)
(I helped save b3ta! The Alchemist king of the needlessly complicated, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:30, archived)
# fair enuff. it was written in one go with no real editing. i may go back and tweak it if i can be arsed.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:34, archived)
# In one go? Then I am pretty impressed.
(I helped save b3ta! The Alchemist king of the needlessly complicated, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:39, archived)
# in one go and half pissed
i'm like hemingway me. well good at writin' 'n' shit.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:47, archived)
# excellent news
I have sketched out the first two episodes
Don't worry about episode 1/pilot or Antiques ;)
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:07, archived)
# Then ours will be the only show with two first episodes..
.. huzzah!
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:12, archived)
# :D
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:13, archived)
# woo
to the yay!
(I helped save b3ta! claptonista ,the idiot boy.........., Mon 1 Feb 2010, 17:59, archived)
# Homeboy
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:04, archived)
# Trust Spock !
(I helped save b3ta! Valin I changed glasses while I wasn't looking, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:08, archived)
# It's his damn Vulcan physiology..
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:12, archived)
# i'm a plumber Jim! not a doctor!
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:22, archived)
# McCoy moonlighting, again? He's such a cad..
(I helped save b3ta! Captain Howdy, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:26, archived)
# battling imperial forces?
there's an app for that
(I helped save b3ta! Smash Monkey lowering the tone of the whole internet, Mon 1 Feb 2010, 18:26, archived)
# Hahaha this is superb!
(I helped save b3ta! Barbarossa is not my real name, Tue 2 Feb 2010, 9:53, archived)