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provocative != edgy != funny (except to immature teenagers)
This is inane, offensive, badly written, poorly spelt - unless measured against the writings of other 14 year olds, then it is quite good.
There are flashes which reveal a possible talent. Some elements that show promise.
This writing should not be made public - but she needs to go through this stage. She should be writing, in her journal. In a year or so, then she should make it public.
And she should find a URL for a dictionary.
I had a stroke last week. It sucks, and everything is hard work. Including typing correctly. She has no such excuse.
Meant to be genuine feedback. Her website is not as good as you think it is. Everybody needs a champion like you.
Well done!
Now fuck off for a year.
(, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:34, Reply)
Sorry to hear your news, fella :(
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The Great Architect is still waiting for his account to be deleted on, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:38,
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