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This is a link post A site my friend has made to keep all her funny stuff
read the pensioners and cosmetics rants

she only made it yesterday so there'll be lots more to come

there's a chatroom so if you could leave a little feedback that'd be much appreciated, seeing as its only been her friends who have looked at it so far

thanks :D
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 12:49, Reply)
This is a normal post Erm...

(I helped save b3ta! Derpasaurus DOG FARTS, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 12:56, Reply)
This is a normal post thanks for the feedback

(I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:10, Reply)
This is a normal post Hmmm
Before I clicked, I made a wager with myself that this would be badly spelled, badly parsed, ill thought-out, and not at all funny.

I won.
 (I helped save b3ta! Enzyme is powered by sunlight, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 12:56, Reply)
This is a normal post well done
what did you win?
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:00, Reply)
This is a normal post A sense of immense self satisfaction probably.
And my respect, because now I know I don't have to click on it.
 (Himjim died a little more inside on, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:01, Reply)
This is a normal post I stopped reading at "Female's of today"
Didn't you post this on here last night as well? Spammity spam spam.
 (I helped save b3ta! krang, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:02, Reply)
This is a normal post you shouldn't have
she's got a way with words, plus these were written when she was 13/14
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:03, Reply)
This is a normal post clearly.

(I helped save b3ta! Wildyles is back to rimming chimps, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 16:34, Reply)
This is a normal post Feedback:
She's obviously about 16 so everything she writes will be fundamentally annoying as a matter of course.
If she lives a little and keeps working on it maybe she could be good one day.
 (I helped save b3ta! Zuowan, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:02, Reply)
This is a normal post she hasn't said what age she wrote these at
i have though, and thanks for the feedback :D
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:11, Reply)
This is a normal post As her friend, please give her feedback ...
I have wasted 30 seconds of my life looking at her musings.
 (mrmatt is staging a 'dirty protest' on, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:03, Reply)
This is a normal post its not like
you were going to do anything useful with those 30 seconds, or were you writing something yourself?
a play perhaps, or a poem?
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:09, Reply)
This is a normal post you already linked this
stop spamming.
 (I helped save b3ta! flurokitty 3, 2, 1 lets jam! (+.[___]·:·), Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:09, Reply)
This is a normal post shh
it was in the dead of night
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:09, Reply)
This is a normal post general feedback
is that it comes across in her writing that it thinks it is wittier than is actually evident, as
much of the content wildly latches onto other topics or strands without fully exploring the main topic or reaching a point.
thus, the 'jokey' elements get washed away quickly in the text and don't really serve any purpose.
It just reads as a standard teenager's blog to be honest, but that's just my opinion only. Hope she enjoys it though, after all, that is what blogging is about. :)
 (I helped save b3ta! The Great Architect is still waiting for his account to be deleted on, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:20, Reply)
This is a normal post You're nice
I like you, you actually give feedback like LNADJKMD, thanks
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:24, Reply)
This is a normal post hey, it's par for the course.
as long as she enjoys it, and gets some hits and good feedback, then good luck to her.
If she enjoys the writing, then it gives her experience in being able to learn as she goes along :)
This being said, it was my opinion only. I'm 32, and probably not the target audience for her words anyway, so it's all subjective.
I just think that it maybe needs a fair bit more content and work before finding a wider audience,
or she is sadly going to get ripped to shreds
 (I helped save b3ta! The Great Architect is still waiting for his account to be deleted on, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:27, Reply)
This is a normal post your mate is an idiot
i join her in hoping she dies young
 (I helped save b3ta! tickle I was away, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:30, Reply)
This is a normal post awww
you're so sweet
 (I helped save b3ta! weaver., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:32, Reply)
This is a normal post Thats disgusting
Don't be such a fucking prick.
 (I helped save b3ta! t0ria has forgotten how this all works, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:42, Reply)
This is a normal post yeah it wasn't quite that bad..
she will get better with practice
 (augsav, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 14:21, Reply)
This is a normal post Feedback
provocative != edgy != funny (except to immature teenagers)
This is inane, offensive, badly written, poorly spelt - unless measured against the writings of other 14 year olds, then it is quite good.

There are flashes which reveal a possible talent. Some elements that show promise.

This writing should not be made public - but she needs to go through this stage. She should be writing, in her journal. In a year or so, then she should make it public.

And she should find a URL for a dictionary.

I had a stroke last week. It sucks, and everything is hard work. Including typing correctly. She has no such excuse.

Meant to be genuine feedback. Her website is not as good as you think it is. Everybody needs a champion like you.

Well done!

Now fuck off for a year.
 (Fred Trellis I am her son. Get over it., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:34, Reply)
This is a normal post Sorry to hear your news, fella :(

(I helped save b3ta! The Great Architect is still waiting for his account to be deleted on, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:38, Reply)
This is a normal post Crap mate :(

(I helped save b3ta! Monty Propps, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:44, Reply)
This is a normal post shitbags :(

(I helped save b3ta! Wildyles is back to rimming chimps, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 16:36, Reply)
This is a normal post My advice would be
to write about things you like and can write about enthusiastically, rather than just rants which are hard to write without coming across like a curmudgeon.

"Don't you just hate old people?" Erm... no.

If you must rant, make sure the targets are deserving ones.
 (I helped save b3ta! monkeon schmonkeon, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 13:54, Reply)
This is a normal post On closer inspection...
She is not a great writer. This is partly because of her views which as everyone has already said, are slightly juvenile and less funny than she thinks.
But the main problem is her writing style. The sentences lack structure and have no rhythm making them almost unreadable. I suspect this will come with practice.
As for content... hopefully it will improve as she matures but for now I would recommend that she reads QOTW. some of the best an most genuinely funny writing anywhere!
 (augsav, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 14:41, Reply)
This is a normal post she made a blog...
does she want a medal or something?
 (I helped save b3ta! mr.dogshit The world's premier anthropomorphic canine faeces, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 15:43, Reply)
This is a normal post Fucking hell!
Narrow minded, over opinionated, badly written, badly balanced, crap.

Tell her not to bother. Some people just don't have it and should not be allowed to speak in public...

I'm sure she'll have other talents which she's be much better suited to improving. This just isn't for her.
 (I helped save b3ta! vix0r was not Matthew on, Wed 17 Dec 2008, 16:17, Reply)
This is a normal post crap sentance structure
no gaps = hard to read when I've a headache from staring at my computer screen all day at work.
may say there is "over use" of certain "things to make you sound a little cookey" and other things.
The writer and Phoebe from friends share a nievity as well as an inability to string together anything worth saying.

But good on you for trying to write stuff down. Keep at it and maybe you'll write something worth writing some day.
Thanks
 (I helped save b3ta! Nostrebor can't be everything all the time., Wed 17 Dec 2008, 16:34, Reply)