to be fair I thought your post had a good start, although the character development left a little bit to be desired. Plot line was strong and the suprise ending was (dare I say it) genius. Little short maybe.
Edit: oh, and ;oP
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wideeye slightly pickled, Mon 30 May 2011, 12:43,
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sigh, back to the drawing board then
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Mighty Nibus who dares gins | @nibus, Mon 30 May 2011, 12:45,
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