Counter-Strike
Well hi im new been lurking for a while and seeing this i thought i would post one of my boring life stories

i once had this girlfriend (right nutter so obsessed) anyway everytime we came home from school i was "supose" to call her at 6 getting fed up of this shit and not wanting to lose her (the sex) i made up a story about how my internet wasnt working so i couldnt phone her or im her and such

what i really did was play counter strike all night long , i told her this when we broke up and she was shocked and appaled but to be honest she was the physco bitch who been leading a double life

well this story was a waste of your time
(DontTouchTheCat, Tue 15 Jul 2008, 18:01, 8 replies)

Well
that was quite the epic story, you sure told that bitch!
(Scobro is still here..., Tue 15 Jul 2008, 18:24, closed)

This sounds more like a rant than a story.
Perhaps elaborate on the double life that she was leading?

And, not wanting to come across as a prick, but a little more punctuation and grammar would certainly make this more readable.
( Thinker, Tue 15 Jul 2008, 18:30, closed)

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
just what le penseur said.

and welcome to b3ta x
( blaireau69 , the Cumbrian Travis Bickle., Tue 15 Jul 2008, 18:42, closed)

That's amazing
Really.
( shadyron, Tue 15 Jul 2008, 19:56, closed)

"well this story was a waste of your time"

But fortunately not a waste of the internet's punctuation eh.
(kitescreech still here, Tue 15 Jul 2008, 21:39, closed)

Agree with Le Penseur
Welcome to B3ta.. thanks for posting. I hope you enjoy it here.

As has been said, I hope you don't get put off by this, but you need to remember two things:

1) Please write properly. If a piece of writing is less than readable, then it does rather encourage people to skip it. I want my brain power used in understanding and enjoying a story; not diverted towards decyphering poorly-punctuated sentences.
2) Your story seems interesting enough. However, you should flesh it out a bit. Explain exactly why she was a "psycho bitch". It might be amusing :)
(EuroSong I love horse meat: best of all the animals, Tue 15 Jul 2008, 21:42, closed)

Eh...
Not at all, young fellow - I quite enjoyed it.

Now, to follow up: Give us the grisly details of Psychobitch's double life - and spare no detail of dasterdly double-dealing dickmunchitude!

But first, brush up on your spelling and punctuation. This is a site of earnest and learned discussion, and your slovenly wordplay is a dishonour to its fine portals and,indeed, to the English language as a whole.

Welcome to the ball!
(El Fandango carved a big EF onto his nemesis' doublet on .., Tue 15 Jul 2008, 21:55, closed)

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You had to call her at 6 o'clock every night? That's just unreasonable. I can how the stress of that relationship really got to you.

But wern't you losing the sex by playing Counter-Strike all night ? You should of had sex with her, and then told her to leave because you had to go and visit your cousin in hospital. Then you should have played Counter-Strike all night.

You could have got the sex, the Counter-Strike and a better storie.
(cannibalklown, Tue 15 Jul 2008, 22:17, closed)