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# First Page of a comic I'm trying to make

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(I helped save b3ta! Chickenhawk is no longer Arkwright., Thu 16 Nov 2006, 20:58, archived)
# I love it.
My only advice would be to give the background a slight shading of grey, just so the characters stand out more.
(I helped save b3ta! Devil Duck: ( ' )< and his cunning stunts, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 20:59, archived)
# Nicely drawn
Is it autobiographical?
(I helped save b3ta! Bloop Fri 16 Jul, 22:10, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:00, archived)
# Yes
I am a bald, bearded student who is reguraly abused by robots in empty warehouses...

... on friday nights.
(I helped save b3ta! Chickenhawk is no longer Arkwright., Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:01, archived)
# I knew it
(I helped save b3ta! Bloop Fri 16 Jul, 22:10, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:02, archived)
# That's a robot?
I thought it was a giant hallucinated tube of glue!
(I helped save b3ta! Ghostwriter can't pick up his pencil, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:06, archived)
# I like it.
Makes me want to read more. Especially the moustache.

And I'd put some heavier balck on there to bring out the shapes.
(I helped save b3ta! Curis, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:00, archived)
# this
is a good alternative to what i said
(I helped save b3ta! Devil Duck: ( ' )< and his cunning stunts, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:06, archived)
# yup
I like it
(I helped save b3ta! bilbobarneybobs I'll be 14 in b3ta years soon., Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:01, archived)
# ah the moustachioed robot returns!
liked it in colour the other day
like it in b&w today
characters do need to stand out more though
(I helped save b3ta! kingsuperspecial is in an audience, wanking furiously, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:02, archived)
# I like the robot, especially his moustache
he must feature heavily in future efforts
(I helped save b3ta! Mousing, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:03, archived)
# He is named Robot Watson


He is a regular character of my art and I decided it was time he got his own comic.
(I helped save b3ta! Chickenhawk is no longer Arkwright., Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:06, archived)
# Very nice
I would ditch the brick in the first two frames so that
a) it is consistent with the last frame
b) the weird perspective of the bricks in the first frame has made my eyes cross
c) I suspect they took you a long time to do and I am a bastard
6) profit

Now make eleventy more. Woo!
(I helped save b3ta! P3te "the Meat", Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:13, archived)
# Id have gained amusement
from the big scene demonstrating that there were only 3 steps or so

but it's very woo :D
(I helped save b3ta! discomeats This canoe, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:13, archived)
# I love it
you have a lot of patience drawing bricks
(I helped save b3ta! mediocre ha ha ha, you're reading this, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:16, archived)
# students don't get grants
but otherwise woo hoo!
(I helped save b3ta! Neon Blue Ah ha ha haa! I feel positively capital!, Thu 16 Nov 2006, 21:25, archived)