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# Thal Warriors, one last go

A while ago I came up with a design for a humanoid Dalek Warrior and posted it here.
That character turned in to a story, then that turned in to a bigger story and before I
knew it I had a sort of script for Doctor Who written.
Seeing as the BBC don't accept submissions and I'm too busy to pursue this, I'm going
to park it here, where it all started. The PDF of my story is attached, if you are
interested have a read, tell me what you think. It's not an attemtp at a career in
scriptwriting, I just really liked the idea of the character and wanted to put it out there.
Obviously if you work at the BBC pass this on :)
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:15, archived)
# Oooo
*downloads*
(I helped save b3ta! Tribs 🦇 ↓ dn ʎɐʍ sᴉɥʇ ↓🦇, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:22, archived)
# ROFL
You massive twat
(prodiqy69 yer maw's reposted cunt, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:25, archived)
# fair enough
thought it would come across as a bit too Blue Peter Special Child for some.
Nice of you to log in to your special account to post that by the way.
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:27, archived)
# XD
(I helped save b3ta! Frogbeat, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:37, archived)
# ROFL??
Try bebo
(I helped save b3ta! Geoff the Clownfish You know Myra, some people might think you're cute, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:58, archived)
# what spineless troll regular are you?
(I helped save b3ta! prodigy69 Currently Orienteering With Napalm Death, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:01, archived)
# Bet it's Rob in disguise
(I helped save b3ta! Tribs 🦇 ↓ dn ʎɐʍ sᴉɥʇ ↓🦇, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:01, archived)
# at least I call people cunts using my own account :)

it's not hard to find out who it is just ask cr3
(I helped save b3ta! prodigy69 Currently Orienteering With Napalm Death, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:03, archived)
# I wonder if it would be possible to make a Doc Who script that parodies trolling?
People always seem so darn honest in the future...
(I helped save b3ta! ..wil, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:08, archived)
# In which the Doctor and <random companion> visit Tralworld
and discover that some alien races deliberately wind each other up. Originally intended to gain leverage prior to trade negotiations, it's since been raised to an artform.
(I helped save b3ta! Tribs 🦇 ↓ dn ʎɐʍ sᴉɥʇ ↓🦇, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:25, archived)
# HARRSI
(I helped save b3ta! drimble he'd been white, he'd been black, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:13, archived)
# *silence as everybody reads*
(I helped save b3ta! Crystal Magnet Like a diamond geezer, but better, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:26, archived)
# I'm more of a visual person.
(I helped save b3ta! atomic A-bomb-a-nation, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:43, archived)
# ^ words!


*cowers*
(I helped save b3ta! prodigy69 Currently Orienteering With Napalm Death, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:02, archived)
#
(I helped save b3ta! atomic A-bomb-a-nation, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:07, archived)
# going to be looking at that a bit later
already read a little and top marks for mentioning spiridon :)(very Bakerish)
(I helped save b3ta! Tyronne Get To Falkirk, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:26, archived)
# It very much follows in the feel of Genesis of the Daleks
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:28, archived)
# one of my all time fav stories right there.
(I helped save b3ta! Tyronne Get To Falkirk, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:30, archived)
# Yeah but the later split resulting in "Phil Collins of the Daleks" was a real disappointment.
(I helped save b3ta! maiden is filmed before a live studio audience, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:20, archived)
# And this two parter is on at Easter you say?
OMG! I would love to see this, what a fantastic idea.
The only downside..... I don't work at the bbc. Sorry
:D
(I helped save b3ta! Frogbeat, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:28, archived)
# it's a Christmas - New Years day special
the BBC had better get moving if they're going to make it in time
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:29, archived)
# So that means
Catherine Jenkins will be playing a Thal Warrior?
(I helped save b3ta! Curis, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:31, archived)
# If only a?
Frogbeat dodges, jumps, clambers and hacks the crap out of a HappyToast's head!
(I helped save b3ta! Frogbeat, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:31, archived)
# One small thing
Davros was a Kaled,not a Thal.
(I helped save b3ta! Tyronne Get To Falkirk, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:41, archived)
# yeah
the Thal I think we found were the only remaining people from their planet (all Kaled killed except Davros) so it makes his trying to save the indigenous population (his old enemies) more tortured (in a good way)
Plus I think the planet was blown up thats why this is Spiridon and not Skaro.

(I'm no Dr Who expert, just did a quick bit of research and asked some people who knew this stuff)
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:46, archived)
# understandable
/I should really get a life but I have loved dr who since I was small, and I am 37 now.
(I helped save b3ta! Tyronne Get To Falkirk, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:50, archived)
# I have a week to go until I am that old
yay and boo
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:00, archived)
# I hope your script has plenty of Catherine Tate in it
I love it when she shrieks "DOC-TAH!" over and over
(I helped save b3ta! Colonel Dracula Two manky hookers and a racist dwarf, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:49, archived)
# get out!
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:00, archived)
# *gets coat*
(I helped save b3ta! Colonel Dracula Two manky hookers and a racist dwarf, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:03, archived)
# *kicks door shut*
(I helped save b3ta! prodigy69 Currently Orienteering With Napalm Death, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:06, archived)
# Well, I read episode 1 and Amy doesn't get her kit off, so I'm out!
Actually, pretty interesting.

At least one b3tan works for the BBC, but probably not in a useful capacity and haven't seen him here for a while. There's bound to be others though.
(I helped save b3ta! Wasp Box like a nervous random stranger at a glory hole, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 16:50, archived)
# sorry, I forgot to say
other than the biohazard suit she's completely naked because, er, just because
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:00, archived)
# because SCIENCE!
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:09, archived)
# But...
A biohazard suit is not exactly Pole daner wear is it. I mean, it leaves everything to the imagination.
(Vinegar strokes Should know better on, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:14, archived)
# it's made of transparent plastic
and Amy waxes
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:16, archived)
# She's ginger
of course she waxes.
(I helped save b3ta! Wasp Box like a nervous random stranger at a glory hole, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:17, archived)
# Does she also wane?
(Vinegar strokes Should know better on, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:20, archived)
# she waxes lyrical
and wanes world
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:23, archived)
# Sounds like she's building a bridge to our hearts
(I helped save b3ta! drimble he'd been white, he'd been black, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:26, archived)
# hearts
Thats a funny way to spell pants.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:28, archived)
# All this talk of Amys
is building a bridge in mine
(I helped save b3ta! drimble he'd been white, he'd been black, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:30, archived)
# If you're panting
Maybe you are having a myocaridal infarction
(Vinegar strokes Should know better on, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:30, archived)
# mrs monstrinho is watching House endlessly at the moment
it's very boring
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:34, archived)
# We need a visual
(Vinegar strokes Should know better on, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:20, archived)
# I like this concept, pretty rough version that this is,
the ending is all wrong tho, nobody pressed a big red button that resolved everything magically at the end... ;)

Seriously tho I don't think you can have a 'big battle happens offscreen' ending, the audience would demand to see that happen onscreen. Also a small but important point, the doctor has never to my knowledge 'called up the TARDIS', altho he really should be able to logically speaking, dramatically speaking it would be total fail, as at any point he was in peril he could call it up to resolve everything and anything...

LOVE the basic premise of the Thal Warriors tho, that would be SO cool! :D
(I helped save b3ta! ..wil, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:00, archived)
# there's be plenty of battle on screen
but the conclusion is deliberately missed in case people want to do an entire cg series based on it like George Lucas has :D

Don't think its a magical resolve, with enough pacing and panic getting the women and children on board should be enough of a task, and I like the way the doctor is powerless to stop Davros, I'm sick of the Doctor being feared by everyone and him shouting "I'm the doctor" all the time
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:06, archived)
# Well yeh that last point bugs me too
his enemies often have ample time to just plain shoot him but won't because he's The Doctor.

Bothers me at times...

I suppose you could argue a lot of aliens respect the importance of a Time Lord's influence on all timelines, including their own, and what with time being so wibbly-wobbly shooting him dead might actually affect theirs.
(I helped save b3ta! ..wil, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:12, archived)
# cowards!
:D
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:17, archived)
# i catch the show from time to time
is the doctor the last time lord because they had a war (with whom?) in which they caused themselves to never exist by effectivly killing their own grandads? The doctor mumbles something along these lines every so often but i've never caught the full version.
(I helped save b3ta! monstrinho do biscoito teeeshurts = www.nogunarmy.com, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:33, archived)
# sort of
there was a war with the Daleks and the Doctor thought he'd wiped out all the Time Lords and the Daleks, only for both to show up again so he wiped them all out again.
(I helped save b3ta! emvee cruor deo cruoris, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:52, archived)
# It's a war between the Daleks and the TimeLords
apparently the Daleks are completely wiped out (Exterminated if you will although they manage to come back via Rose Tyler's dna and a random mad dalek that was lost in time for some reason - who knows!) but at the cost of all Time Lords but The Doctor are wiped out too. However, The Master still existed and he (as I understand it) was a TimeLord too and the great end of everything series where The Dotor ends up teaming up with The Master in a joint effort to send the (supposedly extinct) TimeLords (some sort of Higher Council of Time Lords Trapped in a time/space bubble or something) back to their time/space bubble to stop them ending time and space. Now following this basically means - They make it up as they go along... ;)
(I helped save b3ta! maiden is filmed before a live studio audience, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:59, archived)
# Marvelous!
Altho it must be said if you are the lords of time itself it can't be bloody easy to wipe you out just by sheer force alone.

The Daleks however, there really is no excuse, other than folks just really like 'em, multi-coloured vinyl humpty backed versions not withstanding.
(I helped save b3ta! ..wil, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 18:38, archived)
# crang!
(I helped save b3ta! prodigy69 Currently Orienteering With Napalm Death, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:01, archived)
# indeed, I'll make sure the sound effects department are aware of the audio requirement ;)
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:07, archived)
# :)
(I helped save b3ta! prodigy69 Currently Orienteering With Napalm Death, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:09, archived)
# Did you mean: crang Top 2 results shown
www.guzel-resimler.org/data/media/251/Ninja_Kaplumbaalar_Crang_Resimleri.jpg
(I helped save b3ta! drimble he'd been white, he'd been black, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:23, archived)
# it's the sound of a dalek being sawn through the skull plate

nothing else.
(I helped save b3ta! prodigy69 Currently Orienteering With Napalm Death, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:38, archived)
# Well I love it
And will therefore *click* it and wish you all the best sir! :)
(I helped save b3ta! Ninj, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:04, archived)
# If you want it passed on you should sort the formatting out first.
There are plenty of scriptwriting sites for templates, including the BBC's own:
www.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/scriptsmart/index.shtml

You should also note from the site:
'What we don't accept - Spec scripts for existing shows – we want to see your original work.'
(glammerocity state of the art Luddite, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:15, archived)
# no I know, that's why I said it wasn't an attempt at proper scriptwriting and was parking here
The BBC Doctor Who site clearly states they don't even open submissions, so I'm not bothering, you need to already be hired to come up with stories for Doctor Who before you can write any it seems.
www.bbc.co.uk/doctorwho/s4/faq/jobs.shtml
(I helped save b3ta! HappyToast Groat froth, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:19, archived)
# See, this is dialog we're doing now.
*exits stage right*
(glammerocity state of the art Luddite, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 17:26, archived)
# FANFIC FANFIC FANFIC
:)
(I helped save b3ta! discomeats This canoe, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 18:47, archived)
# Oww....
Shiny.....
(The invisable man Is having a long lazy soak in search, Wed 1 Sep 2010, 19:56, archived)
# I know someone at the BBC
I'll pass it on rebadge it as my own work ;)
(I helped save b3ta! doog Don't read this., Wed 1 Sep 2010, 20:00, archived)