
in all seriousness, a) it's wonderfully illustrative but b) it is a little confusing.
I don't get why the tooth is chained up
or why the brush and paste are the way they are.
If it was me, I'd do away with the prison setting and have the brush and paste looking more heartbroken, like the tooth is being unfaithful. At the moment they look like the tooth is going to be executed.
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 14:45,
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I don't get why the tooth is chained up
or why the brush and paste are the way they are.
If it was me, I'd do away with the prison setting and have the brush and paste looking more heartbroken, like the tooth is being unfaithful. At the moment they look like the tooth is going to be executed.

what's the reasoning for the chains and that?
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I think it would work better if the tooth was in a bed, then the mouthwash pissing on him and the whip-like floss would make more sense. Perhaps have fishnets on the floss?
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i instantly thought that the tooth was paying for kinky non-brushing action with floss and mouth wash.
but then i'm not sure what that says about me, perhaps i should go into politics.
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 15:18,
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but then i'm not sure what that says about me, perhaps i should go into politics.

so the mouthwash IS actually pissing on him :D
in which case I'd put bondage masks on the floss and mouthwash or maybe add some nipple clamps and studs and stuff.
Fluff it up a bit
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 14:50,
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in which case I'd put bondage masks on the floss and mouthwash or maybe add some nipple clamps and studs and stuff.
Fluff it up a bit

maybe make it look a bit more sleazy/seedy/sexual than one of actual danger
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Yeah, general idea was the tooth was unsatisfied with his brushy wife, and has sought other methods to, err... satisfy him. I love the idea of adding dominatrix-y S&M stuff to it, so think i'll work that into it.
Thanks folks! Feel a bit better now...
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 15:05,
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Thanks folks! Feel a bit better now...

He should wipe that up before it dries to his leg hairs. Let him try to get it off THEN.
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The tooth is Jummy Saville
The bottle is the BBC
The fag packet is the Press
The brush the British Public
and I don't know what the paint tube stands for...
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The bottle is the BBC
The fag packet is the Press
The brush the British Public
and I don't know what the paint tube stands for...

The poor tooth, now shackled to an endless cycle of flossing and mouthwash, looks on, its pulpy heart wracked with emotion at seeing the plight of the brush who, its raison d'etre called into question by an over-zealous hygienist, grapples with an existential crisis of Faustian proportions.
...or summat.
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 14:56,
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...or summat.

Yeah - a bedroom motif would be more obvious than the S&M dungeon for the cuckolded dental hygiene implements.
AWESOME illustration though!
x
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 15:00,
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AWESOME illustration though!
x

Naughty tooth, traumatizing his family
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 15:02,
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and that toothpaste has severe abandonment issues.
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I have no idea what's going on but I like what I see.
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 15:32,
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slightly confuses things.
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Mrs. Brush had have given Mr. Tooth oral-b more often, he may have been satisfied.
Seriously though I think it's great. It's just a wee bit too cryptic and needs some, but not too many of the previously suggested clues adding to it.
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 15:42,
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Seriously though I think it's great. It's just a wee bit too cryptic and needs some, but not too many of the previously suggested clues adding to it.

These are all inanimate onjects for christ's sake.
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 16:01,
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Aww, poor Toothbrush feels left out, because Mindy Molar is being held prisoner by Floss and Fluid, who have initiated an evil plan to replace traditional brushing with poncey faffing around using high-margin products with too much packaging.
Why, even now, in another part of their lair, the Supersonic Robot Brush is waiting to be unleashed... once it's finished charging.
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Why, even now, in another part of their lair, the Supersonic Robot Brush is waiting to be unleashed... once it's finished charging.

agreed with the other suggestions up here:
- tart up the S&M gimps.
- put the tooth on a big fluffy bed
- more red and pink, more light, more obvious associations with sex
- fishnet stockings on the tooth roots?
- maybe make the floss into a cat-o-nine-tails, tie a knot in the end and make it more obviously whip-like
- the box of floss could be sweating more through exertion
- obvious whip marks on the tooth?
I could go on...
And change the title, perhaps, to When Brushing Just Isn't Enough. The word 'alone' is slightly ambiguous, and has associations with (e.g.) showering alone, being alone etc...
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Mon 29 Oct 2012, 19:24,
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- tart up the S&M gimps.
- put the tooth on a big fluffy bed
- more red and pink, more light, more obvious associations with sex
- fishnet stockings on the tooth roots?
- maybe make the floss into a cat-o-nine-tails, tie a knot in the end and make it more obviously whip-like
- the box of floss could be sweating more through exertion
- obvious whip marks on the tooth?
I could go on...
And change the title, perhaps, to When Brushing Just Isn't Enough. The word 'alone' is slightly ambiguous, and has associations with (e.g.) showering alone, being alone etc...

I've only ever seen pictures of basement dungeons but I know one when I see one, and yeah, shackles don't always mean he doesn't want to be there :P
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